Hi!
I love sauna, and I went to Hottayu(pablic bath).
When I go there, the collaboration event with SAVON(body care brand) was held, so the exterior and interior were so cute.
There were the bodysoap, body scrab, and body cream of SAVON, and I could use them for free.
I was so relaxed because it smelled so nice.
Typically, more male customers came public bath than female customers in Japan, however a lot of female customers came there because of SAVON collaboration event, so I waited line for 15 minutes.
I was satisfied that I was able to go to Hottayu, which was my dream, but there were many people, so I hope to go there again when there are less people.

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Hi! I love saunas, and I went to Hottayu (a public bath).
When I got there, there was a collaboration event with SAVON (a body care brand), so the exterior and interior were so cute.
They had SAVON body soap, body scrub, and body cream, which I could use for free.
I was so relaxed because they smelled so nice.
Typically, there are more male customers at public baths than female customers in Japan, however, due to the SAVON collaboration event, there were a lot of female customers and I had to wait in line for 15 minutes.
I was satisfied that I was able to go to Hottayu, which was my dream, but there were many people, so I hope to go there again when there are fewer people.

こんにちは。！
英語が話せるようになりたい30代女性です。

わたくし、サウナがすきです。

ということで、先日、西新井駅にある堀田湯に行ってきました。
いまはボディケアブランド？のSAVONとコラボしており、外装はもちろん、銭湯の中もSAVON風に素敵に装飾されていました。
また、洗い場にはSAVONのボディソープとボディクレンズ、脱衣所にはボディクリーム3種が置いてあり、自由に使えるようになっていました。
銭湯全体がSAVONらしい甘めのいい香りがして、街の銭湯とは思えない素敵な空間にとても癒されました。

さすが女性に人気のSAVONコラボ中とあって、堀田湯に到着してから、番号札を受けとり、15分ほど外で待ちました。
女性の方に待ちが発生することってほぼないですよね。男性の方に待ちはなさそうでした。
また、平日の17時ごろに到着したのですが、ボディスクラブはほぼなくなっている状態でした。

念願の堀田湯、SAVONコラボ中に行けて非常に満足したのですが、全体的に混雑気味で、サウナで完璧に整える感じではなかったですねえ。
また空いていそうな時に伺えたらいいな、と思います。