１つ目の質問（英作文の添削をしてもらう）

・自分からの質問
「英検１級の英作文を以下のように書きました。添削とアドバイスをお願いします。
Topic↓
Agree or disagree: Overseas outsourcing contributes to the sustained development of the global economy?

英作文↓
     Overseas outsourcing has been common recent years, but I strongly disagree with it because it will lead to low employment among local people, cheaper quality of products or services, and undesirable migration.
     The biggest reason is that a lot of local workers might lose their jobs because people from foreign countries could replace them for cheaper salaries.  If local workers lose their jobs, they would not likely to spend their spend their money, leading economical stagnation in their country.
     Another related point is that it is impossible to keep high quality of products and services because companies tend to hire foreign workers with low salary, causing less quality in products and services.  Moreover, it is difficult to oversee and control foreign laborers because of a language problem.  Without proper training, it is hard to maintain the quality.
     My final argument against overseas outsourcing is a concern of migration.  If people from foreign countries get used to working in a country, they will unlikely to let go of their jobs, causing a lot of migration.  Because there must be some culture differences, trivial or significant, battles will take place among citizens.  This situation is far from sustained development .
     For these reasons, I do not think overseas  outsourcing is a right way to develop the global economy.  In fact, it should be limited to a few special cases.」

・Chat GPTからの回答
「Here are some suggested corrections and improvements for your essay:

1. Introduction:

   • Original: Overseas outsourcing has been common recent years, but I strongly disagree with it because it will lead to low employment among local people, cheaper quality of products or services, and undesirable migration.

   • Suggestion: In recent years, overseas outsourcing has become increasingly prevalent. However, I strongly disagree with this practice due to its potential negative impacts, including reduced employment opportunities for local residents, compromised product or service quality, and the risk of undesirable migration.

2. First Paragraph:

   • Original: The biggest reason is that a lot of local workers might lose their jobs because people from foreign countries could replace them for cheaper salaries.

   • Suggestion: The primary concern is that many local workers may face unemployment as foreign individuals, willing to work for lower wages, could replace them.

3. First Paragraph:

   • Original: If local workers lose their jobs, they would not likely to spend their spend their money, leading economical stagnation in their country.

   • Suggestion: If local workers lose their jobs, they are less likely to spend money, resulting in economic stagnation within their country.

4. Second Paragraph:

   • Original: Another related point is that it is impossible to keep high quality of products and services because companies tend to hire foreign workers with low salary, causing less quality in products and services.

   • Suggestion: Another related concern is the challenge of maintaining high-quality products and services when companies opt for hiring foreign workers at lower salaries, potentially compromising the overall quality.

5. Second Paragraph:

   • Original: Moreover, it is difficult to oversee and control foreign laborers because of a language problem.

   • Suggestion: Furthermore, overseeing and controlling foreign laborers becomes challenging due to language barriers.

6. Second Paragraph:

   • Original: Without proper training, it is hard to maintain the quality.

   • Suggestion: The absence of adequate training makes it difficult to uphold the desired quality standards.

7. Third Paragraph:

   • Original: My final argument against overseas outsourcing is a concern of migration.

   • Suggestion: The ultimate issue I raise against overseas outsourcing is the potential for migration-related problems.

8. Third Paragraph:

   • Original: If people from foreign countries get used to working in a country, they will unlikely to let go of their jobs, causing a lot of migration.

   • Suggestion: If individuals from foreign countries become accustomed to working in a host country, they are less likely to relinquish their jobs, leading to increased migration.

9. Conclusion:

   • Original: For these reasons, I do not think overseas outsourcing is a right way to develop the global economy. In fact, it should be limited to a few special cases.

   • Suggestion: In conclusion, considering these factors, I believe that overseas outsourcing is not the ideal approach for fostering global economic development. Its application should be restricted to specific and well-justified circumstances.

Remember to double-check grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure. Overall, your essay presents a clear argument against overseas outsourcing, and these suggestions aim to enhance clarity and expression.」

２　２つ目の質問（何点になるかを教えてもらう）

・自分からの質問（１で指摘された修正点は修正せずにそのまま送信しました）
「英検１級の英作文を以下のように書いたら、何点ぐらいですか？日本語で回答をお願いします。内容、構成、語彙、文法、総合得点を教えてください。各項目が８点満点で採点され、合計３２点です。

Topic↓
Agree or disagree: Overseas outsourcing contributes to the sustained development of the global economy?

英作文↓
     Overseas outsourcing has been common recent years, but I strongly disagree with it because it will lead to low employment among local people, cheaper quality of products or services, and undesirable migration.
     The biggest reason is that a lot of local workers might lose their jobs because people from foreign countries could replace them for cheaper salaries.  If local workers lose their jobs, they would not likely to spend their spend their money, leading economical stagnation in their country.
     Another related point is that it is impossible to keep high quality of products and services because companies tend to hire foreign workers with low salary, causing less quality in products and services.  Moreover, it is difficult to oversee and control foreign laborers because of a language problem.  Without proper training, it is hard to maintain the quality.
     My final argument against overseas outsourcing is a concern of migration.  If people from foreign countries get used to working in a country, they will unlikely to let go of their jobs, causing a lot of migration.  Because there must be some culture differences, trivial or significant, battles will take place among citizens.  This situation is far from sustained development .
     For these reasons, I do not think overseas  outsourcing is a right way to develop the global economy.  In fact, it should be limited to a few special cases.」

・Chat GPTからの回答
「内容：7点
　構成：7点
　語彙：6点
　文法：6点
　総合得点：26点

ポジティブな点：

• 主題に対するはっきりとした立場が示されており、主張が明確です。

• 各パラグラフが一貫しており、論理的な構造があります。

改善が必要な点：

• いくつかの文法的な誤りや表現の不自然な箇所があります。例えば、「they would not likely to spend their spend their money」は「they would be less likely to spend their money」などに修正が必要です。

• 語彙の選択がもう少し幅広いと、より充実した論文になるでしょう。

• 一部の表現が冗長であるため、より簡潔にまとめると読みやすくなります。

総合的には、十分な主張がありますが、文法や語彙の向上がポイントを高めるのに役立つでしょう。

３　Chat GPTに採点をしてもらっての感想

・今回は数字を出してもらえた。採点をしてもらえた。
・今回の採点は甘すぎず、厳しすぎず、ちょうど良かった気がする。
・添削ではOriginalのすぐ後にSuggestionがあるので、わかりやすい。このSuggestionをよく読んで、自分の頭の中に納得しながら入れることが大事だと思う。
・前回の反省を生かして、分詞構文を使ってみた。好ましくない結果を伴う場合は、leading to~の他に、resulting in~も使えるようにしていく。
・language problemsをlanguage barriersの方が良かった。
・because ofを使いがちなので、due toも使えるようにしたい。